934
939
941
942
945
961
963
965
974
1066
1067
1071
1076
1080
1086
1091
1092
1094
1110
1113
1114
1116
1121
1127
1133
"His won-lost record is [%pitching w word] and [%pitching l word] "
"has a won-lost record of [%pitching w] wins and [%pitching l] losses "
Bunches of these again in this section. Shouldn't have [word] (or mention what they are) since what these numbers represent is already given.
939
945
965
"losses with [%pitching k word] in [%pitching ip] innings with a lifetime [%pitching era] ERA."
Quite a few of these too. Too many "with"s. Should change to "innings and a lifetime"
658
935
939
950
1072
1085
1119
"he has notched [%pitching k] career strikeouts"
Quite a few of these. This category is dealing with his season numbers.
953
"has fanned [%pitching k] in [%pitching ip] innings pitched and collected a [%pitching w]-[%pitching l] record and a [%pitching era] ERA. "
Too many "and"s. Should be "record with a [era]"
958
"pitched [%pitching ip word]. "
Looks like this would say "pitched 20 innings pitched (or IP)" Either way, should say "pitched [ip] innings."
961
"struckout [%pitching k] "
Struck out should be two words?
962
"He has started [%pitching gs word], stuck out "
Don't need [word], should just be [gs]
Also: Spelling, struck
1084
"game appearances,put up an "
Space needed between "appearances," and "put"
1087
"One thing for sure--"
Should be "one thing's for sure"
1088
"throws well for a man in his age"
Should drop "in"
1089
"he is not sure, if his arm will hold out another five years"
Shouldn't have a comma there.
1092
"That why he is still on the roster"
Should be "that's why"
1102
"fanned [%pitching k] batters [%pitching ip] innings"
Should be "batters in [ip]"
1106
"date [%personlink L] has compiled a ERA of [%pitching era] "
Should be "compiled an era"
1108
"posting [%pitching w word] and [%pitching l word] mark"
Should drop "mark".
1132
"[%personlink L] is [%pitching w]-[%pitching l] with [%pitching gs word] with a [%pitching era] ERA "
Too many "with"s. I'd change it to "[l] with [gs word] and a [era]"
Done with most of the stories... all that remains (story wise) is the GM hirings.
