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Old 03-05-2013, 12:43 PM   #40
Daletiel
Minors (Single A)
 
Join Date: Apr 2012
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In individual scouting reports, the following tweaks might make things read a bit better:

Quote:
[88-308] Jake Gardiner is a first liner
Jake Gardiner is a defenseman, so "first liner" doesn't make as much sense as "first-pair defenseman" or "first-pair d-man".

Quote:
[187-396] Gardiner has a very high stamina
Would read better as "Gardiner has a very high stamina level."

Quote:
[77-301] Gardiner has a good vision
Would read better as "Gardiner has good vision."

Additionally, [187-396], [184-390], [77-301], [88-308], [102-272], [141-350] and [131-339] all are missing periods at the end of their blurbs.
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