Tib,
Dropping a note to say that I basically killed any productivity on shift tonight to read through your dyansty story. As a writer, myself, I found it thoroughly enjoyable. Unfortunately, I cannot credit you for my decision to purchase ITP and OOTP, but it bolstered my confidence in purchasing it.
One editing suggestion: Throughout your posted chapters, there seems to be some strange paragraphing problems. With scenes, writers tend to use double-spacing to shift from one scene or another, and I'm not sure if when you cut and paste into the posting dialogue if the bulletin board is formatting line breaks weirdly or not, but there were several times when I thought you'd jumped from one scene to the next, only to find that it was the same scene.
Keep up the fine work.
-- ZC